Platoon The Warriors

CHARLIE

These feelings sweet I want to write
these intentions beautiful pen can express
deliberately fly my head reeling
through the neck, shoulder and arm
sing as they soar
like flocks of doves beautiful
their whiteness blinding rays of hope
mortal eyes burn with the purest love.
The platoon of peace warriors
armed with olive branch
rushes in my hand waiting
coiled around pen pregnant.
They crawl that implement
Voice Silenced
speech without talking
and down the river of ink
until these sweet birds respond
this barrage of metal that condemns these words
carried on the backs of angels.
Doves reduced to no more
pigeons simple
Back to flee my bubbles, broiling brain
intimidated by the pen-point
that the rules of an author's world.
And yet, nothing purely material
can have a soul.
One day, the touch
secret dreams, and throughout the hope
will break the earthen dam
Abd love loose on paper
a million different lines

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ooh i like it!

EDIT: I know you say no, but you're so good, and chat in a group and we need a song to an album, and I was wondering, could you give me the right stuff or something else?

uh I think you should change this line
their whiteness blinding rays of hope
he not a little sense to me
others that I think your very discriptive and gave a good amount of detail and makes great comparison and yes what about this line
Abd love loose on paper
I think you misspelled something =)

I love this poem, but you're not worried about becoming the property of Y! Once it is resolved?

y'm yeers too OLE.
Y grammarish kan't peropper reading ritual use, or a spell.
Y GEE duffinetilly uhhbout lie kan't km.

y'm channels tirteen-e, 2!

Does Kool whe're sum naygerrs.

allso ih'm badd att maychink mieself beeing konsistintid
wut a friggin consinent?
I think the continent?
conntestant?
Protestant?
i like a ham uhhve showing uh kweschin

excellent poem, very descriptive and detailed and Judi said Im a delay and jealous cos u hv way with words and all i hv is the fact that I cannot spell!

excellent poem

Good luck and write more

Ash

The wording is much too simple. It simply does not for me. But, this poem reminds me of a poem Beowulf. No history of the poem, but the fact that Beowulf is about 500 pages.